RW WK4: daveDILLY vs Mal Diction (FEEDBACK)

[Bag Mandela]

Regular Battle
Bars due Saturday 16th Nov
Public voting closes Monday
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Overall public vote = 1 vote
MV’s vote = 1 vote
Bags vote = 1 vote
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6 lines each (doesn’t have to be 3 bars with a set up, punch format, you have creative freedom)



Posting explanations / references below your bars is strongly recommended.
Rebuttals, late drops (unless you have a 24hr ext) & no shows are an instant loss.

MV & I will reach a conclusion on bar of the week & the winner will receive $20 to purchase a small quantity of narcotics.

@daveDILLY @mal diction

[mal diction]

check in

[daveDILLY]

here

[mal diction]

You’re not near my level.. elevation nor firmament
Dave been rapping for a while; but seems he’s just learning it
My turn again... beat you with a burning fist…
Pertinent; break your back.. Give a body tourniquet
You’re oddly learning this, I got my shoddy workin’ spits..
Take your raps, hands down. Legs off and serve u kid

expo:
You may not get my punchlines b/c i’m witty
Not focusing on the normal setup/punches.. Just being funny
When you read me imagine a live battle

[Bag Mandela]

@mal diction wins by no show. That read smooth as fuck btw, I wouldn't have said it would translate better in a live performance necessarily but I suppose that depends on who's reading it, it's all the same to me. Still fucking with the unique style & vibe though, gonna leave this one open for feedback til the next round drops.