Bahriman Vs whoisthat - Open For Votes

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Thread: Bahriman Vs whoisthat - Open For Votes

  1. #1

    Bahriman Vs whoisthat - Open For Votes

    5 bars
    Due Friday night

    @WHOISTHAT

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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat

    Check

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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat

    My fists BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
    Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE

    Your trash and NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
    Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!

    I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
    It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS

    You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK GROUND!
    With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!

    I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweights, unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
    You wouldn't land a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH


    - - - Updated - - -

    Was supposed to be smack crowd, not smack ground, it autocorrected, but I don't know how to edit it.

  4. #4

    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat

    WhoIsThat AKA the Britt assassin




    RR Bitch boy....
    Put 50 in this G Unit, Fam, Friends all on the die list
    Kill everone but WhoKid...have'm scratch'n his way out the casket I buried him alive in
    Wen You hear Pop Music? 20 w/e Hits this chicks ass N neck
    Or I'll put the Spear below your neck! Everyone loves seeing Brit Grabbin Chest
    & The women U love take my worst pitch, give'r nice bone
    Then let the clique put Numbers Insider Box like MLB's Strike Zone
    Look @ me wrong? Blade to your temple, than run out Wit Rep
    Cos THAT a dead man... as I point @ the blood that pours out your head
    RR losers stretchin shit, I keep it short, sweet N new
    We know Menace your interest, But we wont talk bout how many times he's beatin you

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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat

    My fists will BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
    Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE

    Your trash and RB NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
    Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS or BLEED CATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!


    I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
    It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF! If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS

    You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK CROWD
    With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!

    I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
    You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH

    Had to drop it a second time, realised how much I missed out, and had some errors Hope that's okay. If not. You can delete the post.

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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat

    Quote Originally Posted by WHOISTHAT View Post
    My fists will BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
    Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE

    Your trash and RB NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
    Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS or BLEED CATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!


    I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
    It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF! If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS

    You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK CROWD
    With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!

    I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
    You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH

    Had to drop it a second time, realised how much I missed out, and had some errors Hope that's okay. If not. You can delete the post.
    yeah you cant edit verse after opponent posts.... Unless @Bahriman is cool with it

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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat

    Ready for votes only yall

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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat - Open For Votes

    Put 50 in this G Unit, Fam, Friends all on the die list
    Kill everone but WhoKid...have'm scratch'n his way out the casket I buried him alive in
    ^decent
    Wen You hear Pop Music? 20 w/e Hits this chicks ass N neck
    Or I'll put the Spear below your neck! Everyone loves seeing Brit Grabbin Chest
    ^Okay
    & The women U love take my worst pitch, give'r nice bone
    Then let the clique put Numbers Insider Box like MLB's Strike Zone
    ^haha good one
    Look @ me wrong? Blade to your temple, than run out Wit Rep
    Cos THAT a dead man... as I point @ the blood that pours out your head
    ^decent
    RR losers stretchin shit, I keep it short, sweet N new
    We know Menace your interest, But we wont talk bout how many times he's beatin you
    ^Nahh

    vs


    My fists will BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
    Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE
    ^ I like it, stetched asl tho
    Your trash and RB NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
    Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS or BLEED CATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!
    ^decent, extremely wordy

    I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
    It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF! If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS
    ^Nahh
    You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK CROWD
    With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!
    ^Meh
    I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
    You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH
    ^ok Closer, still stretched to all hell.


    So yea, this one was interesting in the fact that the punches on both sides were decent throughout, or at least decent attempts.. still it was tough to read Who's verse at times and although i appreciate the effort, and the punches were sometimes funny and consistent, they were waaayyyyy toooo lengthy and took massive sting away from otherwise interesting concepts.


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    Re: Bahriman Vs whoisthat - Open For Votes

    Bahriman:
    Opener- this was nice. Good concept, and worded harshly. What i didnt like was how dated the reference was. It works over all tho
    Pop 20- same as above in terms of reference relevance. The wording here was choppy tho.
    Strike zone- this was good
    Temple run- not feeling this.
    Closer- that menace play dont work. Its forced. Decent idea tho

    Vs
    Whos that:
    A whole lotta stretched shit.

    Vote: bahriman.
    Bah- pretty solid verse. Just, if ur gonna use a reference, make sure its current or relevant to ur opponent.

    Whoisthat- u have decent ideas but u need to shorten ur bars up. U are relying on multis here, which RB doesnt gaf about. U basically have 2bars per line. Thats too much. For example:

    I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS
    your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS! 
    ^^^this is its own bar. With its own concept, setup, and punchline.

    And -

    You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS!
    He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH
    ^^^again, its a stand alone bar.

    So shorten ya shit up and u'll be pretty good because u have decent concepts and ideas already.
    Kill a bitch and kill her kid
    all depends what her nigga did



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