5 bars
Due Friday night
@WHOISTHAT
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5 bars
Due Friday night
@WHOISTHAT
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My fists BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE
Your trash and NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!
I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS
You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK GROUND!
With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!
I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweights, unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
You wouldn't land a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH
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Was supposed to be smack crowd, not smack ground, it autocorrected, but I don't know how to edit it.
WhoIsThat AKA the Britt assassin
RR Bitch boy....
Put 50 in this G Unit, Fam, Friends all on the die list
Kill everone but WhoKid...have'm scratch'n his way out the casket I buried him alive in
Wen You hear Pop Music? 20 w/e Hits this chicks ass N neck
Or I'll put the Spear below your neck! Everyone loves seeing Brit Grabbin Chest
& The women U love take my worst pitch, give'r nice bone
Then let the clique put Numbers Insider Box like MLB's Strike Zone
Look @ me wrong? Blade to your temple, than run out Wit Rep
Cos THAT a dead man... as I point @ the blood that pours out your head
RR losers stretchin shit, I keep it short, sweet N new
We know Menace your interest, But we wont talk bout how many times he's beatin you
My fists will BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE
Your trash and RB NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS or BLEED CATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!
I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF! If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS
You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK CROWD
With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!
I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH
Had to drop it a second time, realised how much I missed out, and had some errors Hope that's okay. If not. You can delete the post.
yeah you cant edit verse after opponent posts.... Unless @Bahriman is cool with it
Ready for votes only yall
Put 50 in this G Unit, Fam, Friends all on the die list
Kill everone but WhoKid...have'm scratch'n his way out the casket I buried him alive in
^decent
Wen You hear Pop Music? 20 w/e Hits this chicks ass N neck
Or I'll put the Spear below your neck! Everyone loves seeing Brit Grabbin Chest
^Okay
& The women U love take my worst pitch, give'r nice bone
Then let the clique put Numbers Insider Box like MLB's Strike Zone
^haha good one
Look @ me wrong? Blade to your temple, than run out Wit Rep
Cos THAT a dead man... as I point @ the blood that pours out your head
^decent
RR losers stretchin shit, I keep it short, sweet N new
We know Menace your interest, But we wont talk bout how many times he's beatin you
^Nahh
vs
My fists will BE PLANTED at your mouth, change your SPEECH PATTERN n let your CHEEK FRACTURE until this GEEK PANICS!
Tonight, I'll have your DREAM SHAFTED! We can talk about our different blood type, because we're always gonna find B AVERAGE
^ I like it, stetched asl tho
Your trash and RB NEED THAT Fuck your WEAK JABS! My punches are like Eminem's kamikaze, the setups, you're not going to know when I'm going to RELEASE THAT!
Man, homie, you don't SQUEEZE GATS or BLEED CATS! With my notes and keys, I'll hit you with a sharp instruments, I can see how B SEEMS FLAT!
^decent, extremely wordy
I'll use an old bar n kill you with the SAME SHOT! You want to take my callout, I'll have you answering through machines, that's how I like to MAKE CALLS!
It's like Gus from Breaking Bad, you really want to FACE OFF! If I actually cared about a "bar, B, I was teaching my daughter how to PLAY DOLLS
^Nahh
You've got nothing but WACK ROUNDS! All that gun talk, I don't care about gunbars, I'm not in a fucking SMACK CROWD
With these punches, you can get SLAPPED AROUND! If females want to be seen out in public with a BA, they've got GAP n GOWN!
^Meh
I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS! He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH
^ok Closer, still stretched to all hell.
So yea, this one was interesting in the fact that the punches on both sides were decent throughout, or at least decent attempts.. still it was tough to read Who's verse at times and although i appreciate the effort, and the punches were sometimes funny and consistent, they were waaayyyyy toooo lengthy and took massive sting away from otherwise interesting concepts.
V/ Bahriman by a nose
Bahriman:
Opener- this was nice. Good concept, and worded harshly. What i didnt like was how dated the reference was. It works over all tho
Pop 20- same as above in terms of reference relevance. The wording here was choppy tho.
Strike zone- this was good
Temple run- not feeling this.
Closer- that menace play dont work. Its forced. Decent idea tho
Vs
Whos that:
A whole lotta stretched shit.
Vote: bahriman.
Bah- pretty solid verse. Just, if ur gonna use a reference, make sure its current or relevant to ur opponent.
Whoisthat- u have decent ideas but u need to shorten ur bars up. U are relying on multis here, which RB doesnt gaf about. U basically have 2bars per line. Thats too much. For example:
I'm CREATING CASKETS, MAKING CLASSICS
your setups are so forced, I wouldn't say you were fuckin with the heavyweight unless you're RAPING FATCHICKS!
^^^this is its own bar. With its own concept, setup, and punchline.
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You need to and a decent perfomence, like I was RATING GYMANASTICS!
He's never seen a real body online, like you were into DATING CATFISH
^^^again, its a stand alone bar.
So shorten ya shit up and u'll be pretty good because u have decent concepts and ideas already.
Yeah. So this was a pretty easy sweep. Whoisthat did what he always does. I get that your used to RR long bar. But even there your bars are considered excessive. And the worst part is, your only punching in like a fourth of each giant bar. The people who do long bar well are throwing two, three, even four CLEAN jabs in each bar. But you got to learn to adapt to the enviroment, and cut most of that excessive wording out. Also stop with just flipping letters. 90% of your bars are plays on one letter of the name or their initials. Be more creative.
Bahriman had better punches, better flow, and some cool personals.
Vote Bahriman
Stretched bars
Bold multis
Vs
Who kid
Brit spear
Strike zone
Clear winner....
V- bah